sighs along the north fork (oh, shenandoah)

the river up home
late afternoon in november
has no fishermen
to keep it company;
a new sign
by the old make-out lot
says you can’t
fish anymore. SUVs
and little old pickups
crush the causeway one
cement instant
at a time, indifferent.
the same cement
where i used to catch the sun
in a tank and cutoffs,
dreaming out loud at
the rushing currents
where you used to swim,
slipping over the
tricky sun-hidden bottoms.
sign says you can’t
swim there anymore, either.
even for november, it’s still;
not cold enough for frost, but
the leaves long gone,
husks of trees no
longer any seclusion
for a lone drunk
or a couple thinking
they were in love;
we’re the only ones here now,
the river and me,
both too old and careworn
for cutoffs or pretenses.

Again you impress the hell out of me.
A sincere thanks for your words
Bindo
beautiful narrative, smooth as the river
hi. i really dug your poem. but moreso on a technical note, although the “snow” you have falling down on your site at the moment is definitely a cool effect, it’s rather distracting and made it very difficult to fully groove on your writing (concentration-wise… and it definitely had an effect on the rhythm because i kept on getting pulled away by the “snow”). kind of like watching a good movie with some other music going on in the backround. then again, i’ve never been here to your site, and this may only be a temporary whim. anyways, i suck though…. but yet humbly suggest that your “snow” takes away from fully enjoying your good writing and maybe that it should be removed. kudos though regardless of my technical criticism, good poem.
maynard,
glad you liked the poem, and i appreciate your inputs. i reluctantly agree that the snow is distracting, “reluctantly” because you’re right in that it is a temporary whim, me indulging my nostalgia and adolescent-like attraction to the latest cool effects…that being said, i’m going to leave it for now since, well, ’tis the season, but it is definitely not a permanent fixture here.
thanks again for stopping by; hope you’ll be back when the weather clears
–jsl